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My Little Creepypasta
Part 1

It was a cloudless autumn night. The stars shone brightly, clearly defined in the dark sky above Ponyville as midnight drew ever nearer.

The town itself was quiet. Most of its population was already asleep, except for those unlucky enough to have to work the late shift. Two bakers, husband and wife, were putting the finishing touches to a large order that had to be shipped to Canterlot early the next morning.

Apart from that, everypony had retired to bed – the only other lights in town were coming from the lower windows of Twilight Sparkle's library, where she was hosting her second ever slumber party with her five closest friends.

They were giggling at the expense of Rainbow Dash, who had fallen prey to one of Rarity's famous makeovers – her colourful hair had been styled into bangs and she was wearing a frilly white dress.

"Ugh! I don't see why you had to dress me up like this," she snorted.

"Sorry Rainbow, but we have to stick to the rules," said Twilight, ticking off another activity in her book Slumber 101: all you ever wanted to know about slumber parties but were afraid to ask.

"Hey, if ah can put up with it then so can you," smiled Applejack, glad that her own turn was over, "Besides, yah don't look too ridiculous."

Dash's expression indicated that comment hadn't helped her mood much.

"Okay! Next activity," said Twilight, using her magic to make Dash's dress disappear and revert her hairstyle back to normal.

The blue pegasus looked herself over to see that all of Rarity's work had been undone.
"Well. That seemed… pointless," she said, then flew up into the air, her wings free to move once again, "So what's next, Twi?"

"Well let's see," said the purple unicorn, "We've had makeovers, we've made s'mores and we've played truth or dare…"

Fluttershy meeped at the mention of that last game. She'd been forced to reluctantly admit that she had a crush on Big Macintosh – a fact made worse by the fact Applejack had volunteered to set her up with her brother and Rarity was already thinking of what she could wear on their first date. She'd spent the entirety of the makeover session silently fretting about how the date could turn out and whether Big Mac would even agree to it.

The final member of the slumber party, the pink candy-floss maned pony known as Pinkie Pie, was relaxing on her favourite beanbag chair, which was propped up against the far wall. She was lying on her back with one of her hind legs crossed over the other and her forelegs folded behind her head.

"Ooh, hey! Let's make s'mores again! They were delish," she said.

"Sorry Pinkie, but I've already crossed it off my list. I'm not sure if we're allowed to do the same thing twice in one night," replied Twilight, "Besides, we're out of marshmallows."

"Oh. Hmm…" Pinkie pondered, tapping her hoof against her chin.

Suddenly she leapt up from her seat: "I know! Rarity!"

At the sound of her name, Ponyville's premier fashionista raised her head from her chaise longue.

"Make sure nopony takes my seat. I'm going to fetch some goodies from Sugarcube Corner."

The pink pony began bouncing off but was stopped by Applejack.

"Hold up there, pardner. I think the rest of us are all s'mored out. Besides, ain't Mr and Mrs Cake busy tonight? Ah don't think they'd 'preciate it if you showed up and felt the need to – you know – test the merchandise."

"Oh come on. I promise I'll be quick!" said Pinkie, but her friend stood firm. She pouted and went back to her beanbag. No more sweets tonight.

"Why are ya so intent on keeping that seat anyways?" asked Applejack, settling back down on a spot on the library floor.

"Isn't it obvious? It's in my favourite place," she replied, indicating with her hoof, "Propped up right against the fourth wall."

Her friend was perplexed: "The fourth wall? What makes that'un the fourth wall?"

"Silly," she giggled, "This wall has the front door in it, so when you come inside and look around it's the last wall you see. One, two, three, four," she pointed at the walls, counting them out.

Twilight continued skimming through her book: "Okay, so we've done that, done that… looks like the next item on the agenda is a pillow fi…"

She stopped mid-sentence and looked around the room. Applejack and Rarity were sitting peacefully and memories of their last pillow fight were still prevalent in her mind. Then she looked over at Pinkie Pie, had a vision of what could happen if she joined in, and decided instead to quietly tick that part of the night off her list.

"The next thing to do is tell each other ghost stories," she said, slamming the book shut.

Fluttershy shook herself out of her reverie: "Oh my. Do we have to? I don't like ghost stories. They're so… scary."

"That's because you're scared of everything," Rainbow Dash retorted.

Pinkie Pie was more sympathetic: "Don't worry Fluttershy, they're only stories. Anyway, sometimes it's fun to be scared."

The yellow pegasus reflected on her possible upcoming date with Big Mac and decided her friend was right.

"Come sit over here," Pinkie Pie tapped a spot on the floor next to her seat, "If you get frightened, I'll protect you."

Fluttershy fluttered over to her and snuggled up against the beanbag.

"Okay, so who's first?" asked Twilight, "Applejack, Rarity, you never got to tell those stories you thought up at our first slumber party. Why don't you guys go first?"

The two friends glanced at each other, sharing guilty looks.

"Oh no, I couldn't possibly," said Rarity, "Besides, I don't think I remember exactly how it goes."

"Er, yeah. I figure ah've forgotten mah story too. Ain't that the darnedest thing?" Applejack grinned nervously.

Rainbow Dash spared the pair from any further questions by swooping into the centre of the room: "Well if you guys can't think of anything, I'll go first – but you'd better prepare yourselves because this is going to be awesome. This is a little tale I call:

Rainbow Dash Versus The Space Monkeys.

It was just another typical day in Cloudsdale. I was flying around doing what I do – performing tricks to wow all the fillies, mares and gentlecolts. First I performed the Buccaneer Blaze, then I followed up with a Reverse Cloudbuster and finally I finished with my latest move – the Tailswirling Salute.

The crowd was astonished. "Why isn't this mare in the Wonderbolts?" they all asked, "She's the best flier in Equestria after all, and she's got such a magnificent pl …"

"Rainbow, I think you're getting a little sidetracked," interrupted Twilight.

…umage - oh, right. Sorry. Well anyway, everypony thought she was the greatest and they knew that if they were ever in trouble, they would be able to depend on her. Little did they know that that time would be coming sooner than they thought!

In fact, it was coming right now. Because far off in another galaxy, a planet of evil space aliens were preparing to invade Equestria and take it over completely!

Oh, they were an ugly bunch alright. Their ears stuck out on the side of their heads and they stood on only two legs. They had hands with opposable thumbs and big, spiky teeth.

They were green too, because aliens are always green.

They were the space monkeys and they were all dressed the same – a purple, swishing cape, a blue uniform with huge shoulder pads and a black and white striped helmet that they had to wear to protect their oversized, exposed brains.

And there were hundreds of them.

The leader of them all stepped out onto a stage in front of a huge purple curtain to address his subjects.

"Residents of Monkeyville! Listen to me! Lend me your ears! Direct your attention towards the words I have to say! Today is the day that we, the rightful rulers of Equestria, shall rise up and take over their world! We shall depose Princess Celestia and take revenge for the exile she imposed upon us thousands of years ago! We shall take our place upon her throne – though not at the same time because there would not be enough room – and conquer those accursed ponies!"

The monkeys all cheered evilly.

"But there is one pony who stands in our way. One pony who could thwart our schemes. One pony who could prevent us from fulfilling our destiny."

He walked over to a big board and whipped off the canvas that was covering it, revealing a picture of yours truly.

"Rainbow Dash! She is the only pony who can…"

"Dashie, I do so hate to interrupt," said Applejack, "But what about the rest of us? There are six elements of harmony, ya know."

"Hey, who's telling this story?" Rainbow Dash frowned and folded her forelegs, still hovering in mid-air.

Applejack relented and indicated for her to go on.

"But we have made our plans well," said the monkey leader, "We have plotted, we have conspired, we have schemed and we have connived."

"We have prepared as well!" shouted a voice from the crowd.

"Right you are!" said the big boss monkey, "And we have come up with the perfect solution to our little problem. Really, really big guns!"

He pulled on a drawstring and the curtains drew back to reveal hundreds of spaceships, all armed to the teeth with rockets, missiles, machine guns – you name it, they had it.

"The time is now! Let us depart!" he declared.

They clambered into their spaceships and the whole fleet of them took off as one, before zooming through space at incredible speed and travelling to our planet almost faster than I could.

Soon they had all arrived in Cloudsdale. Everypony was terrified and chaos ensued. They all cowered and hid away from the space invaders.

The boss monkey opened the canopy of his spaceship and pulled out a megaphone.
"Rainbow Dash!" he cried, "We challenge you to pony-on-monkey combat! We demand that you come out and face us! We order you to fight for the future of your world, so that we can defeat you and finally rule all of Equestria! And then it shall be us who is in charge, not your precious Princess Celestia, nor her reclusive sister, in fact nopony at all! For it shall be us who are the new commanders-in-chief! Muuhahahaha! Now come out!"

So there I am, flying out of my house, taking my time – I see the monkeys with their huge fleet of spaceships and I'm not even bothered. Because you know, these guys are nothing to me. I could take them out in ten seconds flat. Or maybe even eight.

"What do you want?" I demanded.

"We've already told you!"

Er… ha, yeah, they kinda did… wait, I've got it.

I just closed my eyes and grinned at them: "I wasn't listening!"

Because seriously, I'm too cool to pay attention to these losers. Right?

"Well be sure to listen more closely this time, because I am not one for repeating myself!" bellowed the monkey leader, "We are challenging you to a fight that will decide the future of Equestria! The whole of your planet is at stake! But unfortunately for you, there is nothing you can do about it – for our armies our vast and you are but one pony! You are just a lone pegasus against a fleet of our most heavily armed war machines! It would be best if you were to just surrender right now. Give up. Relinquish your world to us."

"Nope," I said, then I charged at them before they even knew what was happening.

I headed right for the centre of their fleet and when I reached it I was going so fast that I broke the sound barrier – performing my signature move, the Sonic Rainboom.
The explosion was so intense that it blasted every single spaceship out of the atmosphere and sent them flying back to their planet, which they smashed into so hard that it exploded, ending the space monkey threat forever.

And so the day was saved, thanks to the one and only Rainbow Dash.
The end.

Dash smiled, extremely satisfied with the story she had just told. Her friends were not
quite so convinced.

"That ended kinda suddenly," said Twilight, ever the master of understatement.

"And it wasn't scary," said Applejack.

Dash frowned.

"Oh, come on guys," she said, "I was the hero of the story. It's not like the bad guys were gonna win, was it? Why would I want to end it on a downer? And I thought I described the baddies quite well. Fluttershy, you were scared, weren't you?"

The yellow pegasus blinked, then smiled weakly: "Oh, yes. Very scared."

Rarity raised an eyebrow: "Seriously, darling?"

"Oh, most definitely," she nodded eagerly, "Yes, it was… very scary."

Dash had now come back down to earth and was feeling slightly deflated: "You weren't frightened at all, were you?"

"Well… no," she admitted, looking away, "There wasn't any tension throughout because you kept saying how easily you were going to beat them, the pacing was all wrong and the very idea that monkeys could evolve to the point where they could use complicated technology just broke my suspension of disbelief. But, um, I don't like scary stories anyway, so the fact this story wasn't scary at all meant that I enjoyed it."

Dash beamed and trotted over to take a seat on the floor next to Applejack.

"Okay," said Twilight, "Now Rainbow's started us off, who wants to go next?"

"Ooh! Me me me!" Pinkie shouted suddenly, giving everypony their first genuine scare of the night.

Twilight exhaled heavily to steady her nerves: "Alright then. Go for it."

Pinkie grinned and went straight into her tale:

It was a beautiful sunny morning in Equestria and there wasn't a cloud in the sky. Pinkie Pie – that's me – had just had a delicious breakfast of marshmallow fluff on toast and was ready for the day ahead.

I bounced out into the kitchen of Sugarcube Corner and saw that Mr and Mrs Cake were very busy making a large batch of goodies for Canterlot, so I offered to help them out because I thought they could do with a taste tester. Because as you know, only the very best cakes will do when it comes to the royal palace. It was my privilege – no, my duty – to make sure they all came up to scratch.

But Mr and Mrs Cake didn't see it that way so they asked me to go do something outside – and they didn't even tell me what it was they wanted me to do! How crazy is that?

So I went outside and the sun felt so warm on my face that it really made me happy. So much better than all the rain we've been having lately, I'm sure you'd agree.

I didn't have anything to do so I decided to go out into the fields surrounding Ponyville.

I was passing by a big bed of roses when suddenly I saw it – a beautiful blue butterfly. I think it was royal blue, which is quite an apt name when you think about it because it's the same colour as Luna's mane, isn't it?

I watched the butterfly fluttering around with a big smile on my face and then it landed on my nose and I sneezed – achoo! And the butterfly flew away.

I bounced after it for a while but I lost track of it, so I decided to have a nice roll around in the grass instead.

Then I saw one of my bestest buddies in the whole world, Twilight Sparkle, coming along.
She told me that Spike was going to be away tonight so she was throwing a slumber party.

My first thought was: "What? Somepony is throwing a party and that pony isn't me? What is this madness?"

But then my second thought was: "Yay! A party!"

So I agreed to come along and then I saw the butterfly again, so I bounced away…

"Um, Pinkie?" said Twilight.

"Yes Twilight?" asked Pinkie, tilting her smiling head inquisitively.

"What is this story about, exactly?"

"Well, I couldn't come up with a really good story off the top of my head so I thought I'd tell you all about what I got up to today," the pink pony beamed.

Her five friends shared bemused looks.

"Darling," began Rarity, "We're supposed to be telling each other ghost stories. Giving each other scares. That sort of thing."

"Oh yeah," giggled Pinkie, "But wait a minute. Dashie's story wasn't scary."

"Well, I know," admitted Dash, scratching the back of her neck, "But it was supposed to be."

"Do you want to have another try, Pinkie?" asked Twilight.

"I'll give it a shot," she replied, "But I'll need some time to think up a super-duper mega-scary story for you all."

"Pinkie Pie being scary? Hah. I'll believe it when I see it," Dash muttered under her breath.

"So, who's next?" asked Twilight.

Rarity pulled herself into an upright position on her chaise longue: "I think I have something in mind."

"You'd better be quick," said Pinkie, "I don't think we've got much time left. Probably just enough space for you to set up a cliffhanger."

"What are you talking about?" asked the white unicorn, "We're not heading off to bed anytime soon."

Her friend just smiled sweetly in response, so she thought it best to ignore her.

She raised her hoof dramatically, getting into story-telling mode: "Prepare yourself, friends, to hear about the most terrifying creatures that ever lived! For this is the tale of:

The Unfashionable Zombie Ponies.

The sun was setting on another day in our beautiful world of Equestria. Ponyville was quiet for now, save for the noise of the town's premier designer toiling away in her shop.

It had been a busy afternoon in the Carousel Boutique and Rarity was glad to have some time to herself so she could work on her designs. It's vitally important for anypony working in the fashion trade to keep up with the latest trends and keep her mind focused on what ponies are going to be wearing in the seasons ahead.

So she worked through into the night, bent over her sewing machine, stitching together dresses, testing out new fashions on her mannequins, totally unaware of what was happening outside.

She was trying to pass an irritatingly frayed thread through a needle when she momentarily lost concentration. The needle fell and pinged against the floor.

Rarity scrunched her face in annoyance but she didn't curse – there's never any call for unladylike behaviour.

It was only then that she realised how quiet it was. Quiet enough for the sound of the needle dropping to be the loudest around.

She tilted her head to one side, trying to listen out for anything, anything at all. There was nothing. Nothing that she could hear above of the hum of the lighting in her boutique.

It was quite curious, and not a little eerie, to hear a silent Ponyville. It wasn't even that late at night. There should still be at least a few ponies outside going about their business, possibly even a couple of fillies playing late.

Suddenly the silence was broken by a loud banging upon her front door. Rarity shrieked with fright and it took a couple of moments for her to compose herself.

Before she could gather her wits enough to answer, whoever it was knocking frantically on her door began screaming for help.

Rarity felt a chill pass through her that cut her to the bone. She knew that voice. It was a voice she was well acquainted with.

It was her sister, Sweetie Belle.

Well, I've reached that time in my life where I start writing about ponies...
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honeybeezly Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2016
You described each pony so well, this should be one of the episodes. I couldn't help but laugh, when I saw the title of Rarity's ghost story, "The Attack of the Unfashionable Zombie Ponies" GIF My Little Pony - Laugh 
Iguanodragon Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2013  Student General Artist
I feel you personified the Mojo Jojo aliens very well.
Karda4124 Featured By Owner Sep 23, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Creepypasta? Well, I know better!
statoose Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012   Digital Artist
"Ooh! Me me me!" Pinkie shouted suddenly, giving everypony their first genuine scare of the night."

thefran Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2012
"said Twilight, using her magic to make Dash's dress disappear "

Please continue.
statoose Featured By Owner Apr 29, 2012   Digital Artist
fluttershys Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
fuck now im gonna be up till 2 again :C
anzul Featured By Owner Nov 16, 2011
you win lots of interents :D
allbutnothing Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
so... many.... references.
KirbyfanNeox Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Is it bad that I read the space monkeys' dialogue in Mojo Jojo's voice?
UnknownColt Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011
Yo pony I head you like stories, So I put a story in your story so you can read it while you're reading it.'
(sorry, had to be done)
SunriseTheVulpix Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Fourth wall = Shattered.
Lillianmax Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011
As soon as you started describing the monkeys clothes I was like 'Please don't let it be..Oh god no... *finishes reading* Haha Really?! Mojo Jojo?!'
supernatural90 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i want to read it... but anything related to creepypastas i avoid if its past like, 8 pm and its 10... hm.
BloodyAliceOfEngland Featured By Owner Nov 8, 2011
AjaxIsIn Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2011
I thought to do the exact same thing...
XD sorry, maybe next time.
avatar237704 Featured By Owner Nov 7, 2011
So far, the story captured their personalities very well, and has a very nice format to it. This story is VERY meta: This is a scary MLP story about each character telling their own scary MLP story. Also, Pinkie Pie told Rarity that she would only have time for a cliffhanger. Since Rarity ended this chapter on a cliffhanger, I suspect that this is also the end of her story. All in all, well written and entertaining. Expect another watcher.
MammoH Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2011
RavenClaw19181 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
I must admit, Rainbow Dash's story was hilarious.
Cyberguy64 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Student Digital Artist
Okay... I want to see illustrations of Rainbow Dash Vs The Mojo- I mean Space Monkeys now.
HalfBobby Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011
TheEvilTater Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011
very good story so far, cant wait till you make page 2, do you know when that will be?
angelofrombelow Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011
Thanks - to all of you. Work and real life is kinda dominating atm but I'll just need a couple hours to finish part two (which will probably be the conclusion). Not before the end of Sunday, maybe a couple days later.
MuffinShy Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2011  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Ooh, this is fun to read, nicely done!
BonXsig Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Buckykatt42 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
I am liking this so far, I would like to see the stories the other ponies tell.
ardashir Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
It's a good story thus far, I hope you finish it.
MashedbananaXD Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
Amazing, I applaud :D
Haissan Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
WaypointBravo Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
First off, excellent so far; everything feels natural. One thing that jumps out at me is that you do a great job of slipping in the memes in an unusually unintrusive manner -- the marshmallow thing in particular was beautifully subtle, and someone not in on the joke wouldn't have even felt the speedbump.

Alright. Now predictions... :)

Rarity has the appropriate imagination and dramatic flair to tell a good story, but her...unique tastes...risk skewing her into the esoteric and lead ballooning at an inopportune moment. She's one of those storytellers that would need a pass from a beta reader or something.

Ghost stories are a beloved tradition out in the country (at least the one I'm from). If she's had enough spare time to participate in bonfire traditions, AJ's tale will probably be a little stock and cliche, but solid.

Twilight's doubtless got a bajillion stories locked away in her noggin, but I'd expect her to pick something psychological and mind screwy. It may go over the heads of some of her more straightforward friends, but it would hit anyone who "gets it" pretty hard.

Pinkie has made half of her living out of messing with ponies. If she's taking the time to actually think something out, we've got a doozy incoming.

Fluttershy is potentially both the least and most threatening one. The funny solution would be for her to tell a story that only terrifies her. Still, she knows fear rather intimately, and she's quite aware of exactly what makes a story scary. If she gets into the zone, nopony's going to be sleeping for days D:
StudentOfCirno Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
WRONG, for a lead balloon CAN float!
Just kidding (not about the lead balloon floating), but I think that is a pretty good analysis of the ponies' characters-to-story possibilities.
Beelzebub1111 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
You'd better deliver in the next chapter...I am not sufficiently creeped out.
LloydZelos Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011

I have the feeling that Fluttershy,s story will be the scariest one...
Pete993 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
"Pinkie, why are you staring at this 'fourth wall' of yours?"
"Oh, no reason." *grin*

This is fun. I look forward to more.
pYez Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
"We're out of marsmallows."

"Ooh! I know! Rarity!"

I was both amused and horrified.
395 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
Has Applejack ever called Rainbow Dash "Dashie"? I thought only Pinkie did that.
Pretty funny story, though :)
ohamarb Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I love Fluttermac
JustinHunn Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
I like the PPG Reference, I'm looking forward to Part 2 :3
jangleman12 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
Rainbow Dash versus Mojo Jojo...?

QUICK! Somepony write a 20 chapter My Little Pony/Power Puff Girls crossover RIGHT NOW!!!
zerofifi Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
Ooh this is looking good
Silvertie Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
"My favourite place: Propped up against the fourth wall."

Bowser6666 Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
.... Pinkie is thinking up a scary story. Because NOBODY KNOWS WHERE THATS GOING, DO THEY!? (Hear my sarcasm!)
Awesome story^^ This looks to be an awesome story.
bubblesage Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
... pinkie's going to tell the ever imfamous cupcakes isn't she?
fluttershys Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
holy cock this is long
SpikelyWhiplash Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
this holy cock is long
I-am-the-Zombie Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
long cock is this holy.
Z-ROller Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
cock holy long is this
verbalanche Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2011
This long cock is holy.
Salnax Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2011
Twilight Sparkle should know a decent tale or two. I'm certain she's read at least 251 of them.

Applejack is a bit too down to earth to tell a supernatural tale I'm afraid. At best, she'll tell some family legend.

Fluttershy is a closed door to me. On one hand, she's scared of her shadow, so the bar for scaring her is low. On the other hand, when everything is scary, you can find horror in every aspect of life. I would not want to hear her story in the dark.
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